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The first time was the easiest. Maybe because I wanted her. I didn't mind following her, watching from a distance as she went about her day. Watching her made the desire just grow faster. Then the day came when I just couldn't hide it anymore. I grabbed her and stuffed her in my Chevy van. I was at least careful not to make the gag to tight, but the ropes, I needed to make sure they were secure.
It was good, I had taken my time and considered every action throughly. The when, the how and the place, had played through my mind so many times. It was like I didn't need to think any more. I took her to the place I had made available and slit her throat. She cried a lot at first, but the screaming is what pierced my soul, traveling all the way through me. The screams were the worst. I still remember the sound as the air gurgled from her open throat. It was done , my first kill. They say the first one is the easiest. I know I will never forget it.
As time went on, the desire to kill needed to be quenched on a more regular basis. That first scream was always with me, every time. I couldn't get that sound out of my head. I decided to help with this, I would play music. You know some hard metal band, but I found myself increasing the volume on every kill but nothing could mask the sound. Those MP3 players ,Ipod thingies, you know the ones I'm talking about, were my next choice of masking the screams, but no matter what I tried the sound penetrated every effort I made. Almost to the point of driving me insane. Why did they have to scream so? Why so loud?  It's not like it was helping them in any way. No one could hear them but me. I made sure of that. The locations were always secluded and far away from any prying eyes. The woods, sometimes an old abandoned building in the industrial side of town. Always away from anyone except us. I do think I liked that part best. Being alone just the two of us. It was like being in love and going off for the weekend to a little hideaway some where that only we knew about . The killing continued for years. All of them were different, but all ended the same. I never once raped them, I never touched one of them, not one, not in that way. Its not like I'm a sicko or anything. I kill for the pure pleasure of watching that final breath being drawn. I would stay with them and watch the color leave their pretty faces. I don't think I have ever killed an ugly woman.  And when they turned cold and grey, and only then, I would move on. Always taking the screams with me. I even kept records and pictures. I  had a list of women that I would kill next. I always did my homework, making sure it was the right time, the right place. Killing is really an art. It takes a lot of effort to do it right. Planning and execution is everything.
Now the last one, oh yeah I stopped killing. The last one really scared me. I went through the routine every step of the way. Step by step. Not missing anything along the way. I waited , grabbed her and tied her up. She wasn't fighting. She just stared at me the whole time. When we got to the cabin and I put her in that chair, she was still just looking at me. Now it wasn't a frightened look, or even a pleading stare. It was more of a glazed over stare, emotionless, lifeless. When I drew my knife and started slicing her throat., she was still looking at me. She never even screamed. I was looking right into her eyes and she never screamed. She just closed her eyes and died. That night the screaming was coming from me, I keep wondering if it was me all along. The screaming I mean. Was it me I was trying to drown out with the music? Was it me screaming every time ? Every now and then it still happens, the screaming I mean. At odd times to, when I least expect it. Still to this day.
I have written very little so go easy on me please. Grammar is not a strong point of mine nor punctuation.

I have been reading a lot because of us excepting literature at #dA-Morgue so I thought what the hell I would try my pen at it.

Hope you enjoy this twisted little confession.........
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princesskittehh Featured By Owner 1 day ago   Filmographer
All done. youtu.be/pX05723Ia_I Hope I read it right. 🖤
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nitchwarmer Featured By Owner 1 day ago  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you, Ill check it out after my Drs appt. :eager:
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princesskittehh Featured By Owner 1 day ago   Filmographer
Hope it goes well. 🖤
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nitchwarmer Featured By Owner 1 day ago  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you it went well :D
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princesskittehh Featured By Owner 1 day ago   Filmographer
Most welcome and thank you too! It got a good response on the channel as well. XD
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nitchwarmer Featured By Owner 1 day ago  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I think I want to post this at my group dA-Morgue
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princesskittehh Featured By Owner 1 day ago   Filmographer
Perhaps featured or a new folder for lit?
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nitchwarmer Featured By Owner 1 day ago  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I just featured it in a journal. We tried to have a folder for lit but it never panned out. Im not saying no but let me think about it some more.
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princesskittehh Featured By Owner 1 day ago   Filmographer
I feel it would be a fine addition to the gallery. People on yt are asking if it's a fiction. WIN!!! XD
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blackcat111 Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
this is lovely and cute. :D I loved it. <3
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nitchwarmer Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks :D
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joseph-sweet Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2011  Professional General Artist
I hope you'll accept our request to add this story to the gallery on :icondeviant-nightmares:
Although the stories still have to be submitted on :iconis-est-abyssus: we'll be voting out of the ones listed in our gallery because it will be easier to weed through them in the end and when the stuff is taken down on the other sites, there will still be a list if the authors want it.
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nitchwarmer Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
NP if you want it. I'm not sure if it fits the word count, I only have so many toes and fingers. :) I was hoping to find the time to work on it some more. I do think it has potential even though I am not a writer.
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joseph-sweet Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2011  Professional General Artist
There has to be someone who can help you go over it, make some suggestions and corrections. It needs a bit of work, but it has definite potential. People who write are writers. That coleridge guy wrote one very long poem and gave up because people said he sucked and he didn't believe in himself. It went down in history with the greats, but not while he was alive. The point being that he only ever wrote one thing that was published. If there was more, it's been lost. One poem, and he's considered one of history's great "writers."
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joseph-sweet Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2011  Professional General Artist
I like it. Good stuff. You say in comments below that his is only your third literary piece? Very good for an early work? Really good regardless. Keep up the good work. Could use a bit of fine tuning, but all stories can. :)
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nitchwarmer Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I have asked several people to help me fix the errors but I don't think people want to get involved with others works. I don't have the education to know how. All I could do is space it better. :)
Thanks for the compliment.
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joseph-sweet Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2011  Professional General Artist
People are probably afraid of offending you. The best you can do is read as much as possible. Some of the best authors have said formal education on writing often isn't necessary and sometimes can force the writing styles of another upon you. Books about writing by authors who write in your genre are good, like "On writing" by Stephen King. but seriously, just filling in, spending some time with the character, helps a lot. You find so much that was left out before and will enrich your story in many ways. Open a text file, ask yourself questions about your character. what the weather was like that night, things that were going through his/her head, likes/dislikes, history, etc. Fill in as much as you can but try to keep with the flow of the story. You're a story teller. Tell it the best you possibly can. I don't think any of us are ever fully satisfied with the finished product, but try to come as close as you can.
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nitchwarmer Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I think that is the best advise I have ever received. Thanks you much, I really mean it.
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joseph-sweet Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2011  Professional General Artist
NP.
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TwistedAnger Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for directing me to this piece...it is an intriguing read...I want more from you. If you can write like this without having written much before it means you have A LOT of untapped resources in that wonderfully dark brain of yours. Could it be better? Of course that's where writing more comes into play. I love the "Serial Killer" confessional...like was said in earlier comments on this piece it has a calm "I'm explaining myself" feeling to it...it is not rushed but more like a thought process being written out Hence why your woman probably ran off for a minute lol. Great work...I'm assuming I will have to watch this profile if I wish to see more so I will :D
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nitchwarmer Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is my refuge from the dark. My persona is much more real hear. Most are surprised that I have this side to me. :) I feel more free here and don't have to be such a hard ass. The groups I have to be strong all the time our people thinknthey can run all over us. here is the real me...
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TwistedAnger Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I'm digging your soft squishy side ;)
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nitchwarmer Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
lol. My wife has brought out more in me than I ever ever knew existed.
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TwistedAnger Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
lol significant others tend to do that to the best of us...hell there are even love poems in my gallery if you look hard enough hehehhee
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MisplacedFox Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2011
this is well written even with the few mistakes...your penmanship is good...don't put yourself down mister! :D
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nitchwarmer Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thats my fave I would like someone to fluff it some and make me proud. :D
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MisplacedFox Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2011
if you want shoot it to me and I will help you if you like...actually I guess I could just copy it and fix then email it back to you
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nitchwarmer Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Either way is fine.
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MisplacedFox Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2011
where do you want me to send it?
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nitchwarmer Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
intheweeds1998@aol.com. I should get it there . Thanks dear I can't wait to check it out. :eager:
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MisplacedFox Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2011
so I emailed it to you ... :)
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nitchwarmer Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I will check my mail. Thanks.
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the-photographicpoet Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I like this a lot. I think it's very daunting and I actually looked over my shoulder, the apathetic tone you've created which dramatically turned at the terminal event at the end... gave me the creeps.

Just to make it a little easier to read, maybe break the paragraphs up a little. It's very stop-start but I think if you made it flow more it could be even better.

Loved this, really. I have goosebumps :fear:
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nitchwarmer Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks. I havent had much experience with writing so your comment helps me some. Thats what a good comment is BTW.
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the-photographicpoet Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome :)

If you like, I could go through what you write and note you how you could possibly improve it?

I don't mean to sound overwhelming or anything, but what you've written is fantastic so I just want to help out with the form :) make it even more creepy ;P
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nitchwarmer Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Right now I am game for anything that inspires me.
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Caity-Kitten Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2010   Writer
I lvoe your first line. Why? Because it makes us automatically think of first times such as "first kiss, sex, bf/gf, ect. ect. and then BAM "I wouldn't mind following ehr from a distance" immedietly sends shivers. For not writing much, your very good. Awesome balance of discription, giving great imagery but not overdoing it. I think you have a vey good adn distinct style.
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nitchwarmer Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow, Thank you very much for the great compliment.
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Caity-Kitten Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2010   Writer
Your welcome ^^
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johannsone Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2010
oooo000 ...

awesome...had my mind full of questions and wanting more...
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nitchwarmer Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks, I dont write much but I want to do more.
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johannsone Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2010
you should..I was so intrigued, still am...
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nitchwarmer Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:D
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AddoPluvia Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2010  Student Writer
I enjoyed it very much. Ah, the calm insanity of it was pure delight. Please continue to write like this. ^_^
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nitchwarmer Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you very much for the comment. That was my wife's concern. How there was a calm confession to it.
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AddoPluvia Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2010  Student Writer
:giggle: Yes, but the confession was the best part. It was creepy, brilliant, and beautifully detailed. I am quite taken with this piece. Tell your wife not to worry, the best fiction writers are all insane. ^_^ Just look at me! ;P
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nitchwarmer Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
LOL thanks. Yes we are. :lmao: FYI this is only I think my third lit piece. I am still self conscience about posting but I enjoyed writing this one.
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AddoPluvia Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2010  Student Writer
I was self-conscience at first, but I just start posting and then I gave up caring what people thinking. I have had writer's block for a little while now and reading your piece gave me some inspiration to start writing again. (I was also inspired by yours to write about a horror scene.)
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nitchwarmer Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I can relate as an artist and thank you for the great compliment. My lack of grammar and like I posted punctuation makes me contentious. But it is fun. I have read some really brutal comments concerning this. I hate, hate mail and conflict.
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AddoPluvia Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2010  Student Writer
Well, I have recieved hate mail sometimes and I tend to ignore it, focusing instead upon all the good comments and constructive criticism I get. ^_^ (I think that you are able to discern constructive criticism from downright insults...)
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